Hello children, it's Friday! Today you will be editing your work from Wednesday to see if you can improve it further.
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Think about:
- range of sentence openers
- adding in subordinate clauses and adverbial phrases
- including ambitious vocabulary
- including figurative language such as metaphors, similes, personification
- a wide range of punctuation